Friday, May 26, 2006

My fair lady


Cynthia walks down the cold winding road, a cigarette on one hand and her paycheck in another. She could finally take Jamie to the place they had been whispering about. The warm undulating whispers. Their apartment had no heat and Jamie's warmth was the only thing that kept her frail body alive. That and the restaurant. Jamie would whisper the name into her ear, enunciating each letter like an orgasmic arrow. A flick of Jamie's tongue on Cynthia's raw earlobes was heaven making love to hell. Their fingers danced in the spirit of an autumn's warmth while the cold breeze blew in. They never had enough money to make that unforgiving trip to the restaurant. Cynthia promised because she knew she was getting a raise soon. And this was one trip she had to take with her blood, her soul, her Jamie. It was the spark of their conversations, the flame of their passion, and the fire of their love. This paycheck would do - a bottle of the finest wine and a course of sinful meat.

Cynthia laid rest her weekly groceries and took a quick peek into their bedroom. Sure enough, Jamie was sleeping. Poor thing – she worked so hard for so little and never did she ever complain. A fever here, a ragged boss there, a sinister coworker here, and a frustrated male there. Cynthia made her way into the bathroom and took a quick shower. She sensed movement – Jamie was up. She would soon hear the news. And she would be thrilled to bits. Cynthia was all smiles as she stepped out of the shower – this night would be special.

Jamie listened. And wept pure tears of joy. She took Cynthia into her long arms and caressed her fair skin. She slowly undressed her and silently kissed her forehead. Her eyes. Her neck. Her breasts. She caressed her nipples and made a slow sacred descent to bury herself into her lover. An embrace of powerful enigma. A kiss of undisciplined passion. An aroma of scented hips. Pleasure in deafening portions. Pain in the happiest of grasps. A climax of unrequited love.

Jamie washed her hands and face in the bathroom. She looked into the mirror and hated her eyes. She despised herself but the damage had been done. This is what she had been trained to do. And the church did promise her God’s forgiveness. She was after all a servant of God. The blood was hard to wash away. Cynthia lay bathed in warm red while Jamie donned her church’s white. She took one last glance at the woman she saved. The same loving smile. Even in the shadows of death she loved Jamie. Jamie wavered her knife around Cynthia's pale breasts and drew a cross. That would be Cynthia's access to heaven. She tried to caution Cynthia about the dangers of unnatural love. Cynthia brushed it away like a true atheist. Damn restaurant. If only Cynthia knew the owner was the head priest of the church. The man who ordered her killing. The man who had saved her from the depths of hell. Jamie closed the door and looked up to God. Another woman to meet tomorrow.

6 comments:

alraqs said...

ooooo wow!!...I was most definitely not expecting that at the end!!...nice, very nice...
~ you know, love is such a beautiful 'thing', Pleasure in deafening portions, nice...and they way you ended it makes my mind go think think think...
~ what I really like about your writing is that you ground it to reality in a way...without pushing anything down my throat, and that really is the best way...
~ tell me, why are you working in the corporate world again? :)...if you're ever able to, give it all up, go live in beautiful kerala and write stories such as this one..

Govind said...

Thanks Roshni!! Haha..I'd love to stay in Kerala and write stories. If only I had the monetary push. :) My mom asked me if I had written in a while. I kinda brushed her off and told her the post was quite racy. That's the problem with my writing. I think of something on impulse and cannot stop myself. For instance, I read an article about gay rights, spawned the opening paragraph, realized it needed a sexual undertone because of its very theme, and got carried away. I need to control myself - I could have told the same story without the overblown explicitness. I'm being critical, that's all. I'd love to know if you cringed as a reader or if it flowed easy and smooth. If it's the latter, I have nothing to worry about.

Intern said...

Goodness gracious!
That was beautifully written.
A dark black short story.

I've seen short-films on IFC, each 15-20 minutes or so. This could qualify as one!

Govind said...

Thanks Intern! I appreciate that comment! I truly do. I've seen some of those short films. They are quite splendid really. I have a long way to go before I'm anywhere as good. I'd love that to happen to me though - IFC contact me to convert one of my stories to film. I'd quit my damn accounting job immediately! I read your blog and saw your photo journal. Truly wonderful. Such vivid imagery. Your photos reminded me of some my good friend Sahan used to take. He has a splendid camera. And the pictures were marvelous. You have a unique eye too! Keep up the good work!

alraqs said...

~ oh no, not at all...I didnt cringe one bit..but I will admit it really depends on the reader and what they are willing to be exposed to, for some it may have been too explicit...but at the end of the day, I think you should stay true to yourself, and what comes out of you...not what a fragment of readers will or will not like...
~ And the 'impulsive' writing you talk about is, in my opinion, what makes your writing click...its very real, and not at all made-up or try-hard...which is a big, big plus...
~ hmm, I agree intern's pictures do remind me of sahan's...too bad he's not taken any for a while now, waste of his camera...I've tried to get him to read our blogs, but he is, as always, 'too busy' ;-)...

Intern said...

Govind - >

I think the story was very well written! It begins with a normal situation with which everyone can associate, then the gay-twist - beautifully handled and then the climax! The end! Thats it!
It leaves a very deep impact ... and comples a person to think!

About IFC films, I still think this has potentials to make it, assuming that you will need to adapt it for screenplay!

But I would like to make another point ... it's even more impressive when an accountant writes stories like this as a hobby! I love range that people display! Like an accountant who can write beautifully, a fashion designer who is politically active; an engineer who can play guitar ... a fashionable socialite who is very caring at heart!!!
So keep it up!!!